My Ideal School
I would like if my school is big so it will be famous. There will be five buildings. There will be green grass and colorful flowers everywhere. There will be lots of stuffs for the students. It will always finish before 2'O clock. I would like to study only science because I could study other stuffs at my house. It will be good if we study with a small computer. So that we can see the things fast and we don't need to have heavy books. There will be five lakes with each building. There will be ducks for eating bugs. I would like the teachers be kind and always smiles.
It will have a school bus too. I have a far house from my school. So I always ride a bus to go home. It takes 40 minuates. Thats long. I waste my precious time. So we all need a bus.
Well there are not so many thing to write about my ideal school.
2 comments:
Hi JangHo!
I think your writing is very interesting to read.
My suggestion for this week, is:
Pick one topic per paragraph. For example, in the first paragraph, you can write about the school and buildings and ponds, ducks, etc.
Then, new paragraph. In the second paragraph, talk about the schedule, and the subjects studied.
Next, talk about the people in the third paragraph. The teachers: how they smile all the time.
Finally, the last paragraph can be about the school bus. You already did this. I think this paragraph is the best one. It is the best explained with more details. Excellent!
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